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Postby checkers » Tue Sep 23, 2003 1:00 pm

I saw the thread that Precious started about Poetry , but then realized she hasent posted any yet!! So I thought I would go first. Well actually they are sorta song/poetry, since I don't have any music behind them.

<span style='color:blue'>Did you come in with him?
Girl I can see it in your eyes
What you don’t know about him can hurt you
Can you see between his lies?

I can see the love
With the way that you look at him
But trust is something that is not taking lightly
And trusting him is a sin

I have a few things to tell you
Some of them you will not like
Do you know me I don’t know?
Do I look familiar I just might?

I once had your man
I once had his ring on my left hand
All it brought me was pain
It barley left me sane
I know what he is going to do
He will get tired of you
He did me

I waited one night for him to come home
It was around three am
And when he did he offered no excuse
Just out with my friends is what he said
But I saw the lipstick
And it was the shade you wear now
Oh don’t give me that look girl
I always knew that you were around

But you didn’t know about me I bet
I was once in your shoes
Have you found the lipstick yet
I see what I am saying is getting through

I once had your man
I once had his ring on my left hand
All it brought me was pain
It barley left me sane
I know what he is going to do
He will get tired of you
He did me


So do what you have to do
I didn’t mean to make you cry
But what is done is done
Do you think you can say goodbye?


I once had your man
I once had his ring on my left hand
All it brought me was pain
It barley left me sane
I know what he is going to do
He will get tired of you
He did me
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<span style='font-size:8pt;line-height:100%'><span style='color:red'>This one is still in the works
</span></span>
<span style='color:red'>And it seems that life is over,
but you don't know why
she left you crying
just trying to survive
but when push comes to shove
is there anything left for you
the life you thought that was so perfect
left you with nothing to do

so you stand on the edge and you wonder why
you really wanna jump and you start to cry
so mabye we send all of our cards and our sypmthaies
and try to comfort your distrught family


life is not over, it's just begun
your life is not a bore
can't keep on trying to fight the battle
when so much of you was lost to the war
you feel as if you have nothing to offer
and you are depressed
and you think if you end it all
it might just be for the best

so you stand on the edge and you wonder why
you really wanna jump but you start to cry
so maybe we send all of our cards and our sympthies
but we wonder why you couldn't see

there is so much more to life then what you see
but you have to find
what it is meant for you to do with your time on earth
but don't cross the line


so you step back from the edge and you wonder why
what really posessed you to want to die
so we save all of our cards and our sympthies
and we all try to live our lives daily
</span>
<span style='color:purple'>What do u have when u don’t have nothing at all
I feel that way every day of my life
I wish I had myself a lover and I finally find someone that I can want
But he doesn’t want me
I finally feel like I am getting my life on track
And someone bombs my train
I finally feel as my relationship with my parents has done a 180*
And it’s in the other direction
I finally began to tolerate my job
And it begins to hate me as much as I hated it before
I finally start to get that body that I have always wanted
But it’s not what everyone else wanted
I finally get to thinking about marriage and kids
And have no one to share them with
I finally meet up with a friend from highschool
And find out we have nothing to say to each other
I finally get at the top of my game
And everyone looks down on me still
So what do u do when u have nothing at all
Realize u still do have something
That man that did not want u before there is another one just waiting
When the bomb blows u off the tracks get back on
Your Father and Lord God still loves u no matter what
That job brings home the bacon
Your body is the way u want it to be
Marriage and kids (see above)
You may not be able to talk to that friend from high school but your best friend now is always available
And finally when u are at the top of your game
Just say to the people who are still looking down on you
“I know u are but what am Iâ€￾
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<span style='color:green'><span style='font-size:8pt;line-height:100%'>My Favorite</span></span>
<span style='color:green'>Down a black top road
There is a river that runs wild
They use to sit there on a blanket and dream
She loved to see him smile

That summer no one will forget
It will stick in their minds
Because when they jumped into the river
It wasn’t for fun
They didn’t want to make it to the other side


Her father was a banker
Tough and strong man
But he broke down as they dragged the river
He held her mother and cried
Because no body was found
He screamed “that was my only daughterâ€￾


That summer no one will forget
It will stick in their minds
Because when they jumped into the river
It wasn’t for fun
They never wanted to make it to the other side
Her father yelled at his
This is all your fault
You should have kept him away from her
They thought they would never get caught
A cop over heard the fathers fight
He knew it was suicide
He turned away as some one broke them up
No wonder they didn’t want to make it to the other side


That summer no one will forget
It will stick in their minds
Because to young lovers couldn’t figure out what to do
And they never made it to the other side


Well they dragged the river and found no trace of them
Just some clothes by the shore
They packed up and headed back
Realizing they could do no more
For two young lovers where lost forever
Taking that eternal ride
Because they knew in their hearts
That they would be together on the other side

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-Chex-

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Postby Bubble_Yum » Tue Sep 23, 2003 1:32 pm

:cry: They were beautiful Chex!!!

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Postby zozon3 » Tue Sep 23, 2003 1:50 pm

:jawdrop: damnn chex
that was GOOD!!!
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Postby whatchagot4meMRJT » Tue Sep 23, 2003 2:05 pm

Great poems/songs. The first one reminds me of the concept of that Toni Braxton song, "He Wasn't Man Enough." I used to sing that song all the time. I'm a geek, shoot me.

I posted the lyrics for that song. It's so freaky how the lyrics between yours and hers are based on the same premise/situation. Excellent concept and writing!




Darkchild, oh yeah
Toni Braxton, oh
Ha-ha, uh-huh
Yeah, uh, uh
Darkchild yeah

Who do you think I am?
Don't you know that he was my man?
But I chose to let him go
So why do you act like I still care about him?
Looking at me like I'm hurt
When I'm the one who said I didn't want it to work
Don't you forget I had him first?

Whatcha' thinking?
Stop blaming me
He wasn't man enough for me
If you don't know now, here's your chance
I've already had your man
Do you wonder just where he's been, yeah
And I'd be worried about him
Now it's time you know the truth
I think he's just the man for you

What are you thinking
Do you know about us back then
Do you know I dumped your husband
Girlfriend,
I'm not thinking 'bout him
But you married him
Do you know I made him leave
Do you know he begged to stay, with me
He wasn't man enough for me

Didn't he tell you the truth
If not, then why don't you ask him
And maybe you could be more into him
Instead of worrying 'bout me
And hopefully, you won't find
All of the reasons why his love didn't count
And why we couldn't work it out

Whatcha' thinking?
Stop blaming me
He wasn't man enough for me
If you don't know now, here's your chance
I've already had your man
Do you wonder just where he's been, yeah
And I'd be worried about him
Now it's time you know the truth
I think he's just the man for you

What are you thinking
Do you know about us back then
Do you know I dumped your husband
Girlfriend,
I'm not thinking 'bout him
But you married him
Do you know I made him leave
Do you know he begged to stay, with me
He wasn't man enough for me

What are you thinking
Do you know about us back then
Do you know I dumped your husband
Girlfriend,
I'm not thinking 'bout him
But you married him
Do you know I made him leave
Do you know he begged to stay, with me
He wasn't man enough for me

So many reasons why our love is through
What makes you think he'll be good to you
It makes no sense
'Cause he will never change
Girl you better recognize the game

What are you thinking
Do you know about us back then
Do you know I dumped your husband
Girlfriend,
I'm not thinking 'bout him
But you married him
Do you know I made him leave
Do you know he begged to stay, with me
He wasn't man enough for me

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Postby tendertoes » Tue Sep 23, 2003 2:26 pm

<span style='color:purple'>Chex...I am so glad you posted!!
Like always...I absolutely love all of them!!! :hug: :blowkiss:
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Postby checkers » Tue Sep 23, 2003 3:08 pm

whatchagot4meMRJT wrote: Great poems/songs. The first one reminds me of the concept of that Toni Braxton song, "He Wasn't Man Enough." I used to sing that song all the time. I'm a geek, shoot me.

I posted the lyrics for that song. It's so freaky how the lyrics between yours and hers are based on the same premise/situation. Excellent concept and writing!





Yes I know the song. I am a country girl and most of what I write is country. When I was writing what you see above, I was in a country frame of mind.

Thanks guys :hug: ask Tasha, I have a ton more.

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Postby PreCiouSbAbY » Tue Sep 23, 2003 3:17 pm

omg u just made my day..i have a poetry obsession. Those were beautiful, I loved them! :hug:

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Postby betty boop » Thu Sep 25, 2003 6:28 pm

Here's goes. Hope you like it. I just thought of it last night.

[I]With you
When I'm with you
All it takes is one look and I'm paralized
One touch and I crumble at your feet
One kiss and I am whole
When I'm with you
I'm stronger
I'm weaker
All my questions are answered
And yet I'm confused
When I'm with you
There is no wrong or right
The world spins
But everything is still
When I'm with you
I dread the time when you have to leave
I don't ever want to know what my life would be without you
And it makes me wonder
Do you feel the same way when you're with me?

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Postby PreCiouSbAbY » Thu Sep 25, 2003 11:34 pm

that was real good, BB. (do u care if i call u that? :lol:)

i'll make one on the spot since i dont feel like looking for any right now...it's probably bad haha

deep within my thoughts
i'm crushed between your love
it's hard to look back on the past
the memories colliding
the lips upon lips
the touch of your hands
it all seemed so real
but then i awoke from a dream
everything was surreal

you were never mine
never were given to me
i took what i saw for granted
and now i have to let it be

time is passing by slowly
leaves falling
flowers dying
and the departure of autumn
leaves that anxiety
of a love that will never come back


:ph34r: wrote that half-asleep ... now its bed time for Precious -_- (any1 watch Season Premiere of Friends, the girl's name was Precious :P)

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Postby betty boop » Fri Sep 26, 2003 2:41 pm

Thanks precious. It's cool as long as non of those b's stand for b*tch.Jk.

I saw friends, well, actually I listened to it cuz I was on the computer, but it was still funny.


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